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Essay 2: In an essay of 300 words or less, choose one extracurricular activity, work experience, or community service project from the list you provided on the application and explain why you initially chose it, why you continued with it, and how you benefited from it.
 
       On an extraordinary cold, storming night eight years ago I sat riveted to a news story on television about a poor rural primary school where children struggled to concentrate on their tattered subjects, lacking in warm clothes.  I strongly felt that it was my duty to be able to do everything I could to help those children. I began very modestly, using my own savings and inspiring and organizing others to also help donate. However, when I managed to go there in person four years later, oh what a shock I received! 

       I found a village very advanced and prosperous: the school was new and bright and clean, classrooms were well equipped and spotless, and most of the homes were new three-storied brick or concrete buildings. For a moment my heart sank, my own sense of worth and contribution shrinking.  However, I was humbled and shamed for my false pride as I was greeted into the village head’s own home where students and their parents gathered to honour and thank me: 87 children whose family could not afford the tuition had been helped to attend school. An ‘Angel’s Scholarship’ fund had been set up in my honour, and 30 of the students professed the goal to be able to be like me – their ‘Special Anonymous Sister’ – working to be able to help others in the future. Truly, my efforts had taken root and grew!

       From then on, I actively organized and joined in the organizations that helped and cared about students in poor villages, with greater pride and inner motives, and deem it as my lifetime responsibility. The lesson I learned will carry on through my life: good deeds, like small seeds, flourish and grow to a strong tree; a tree of wisdom and social support.

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